J.C. Belding

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Kindling, Piled high upon yesterday's ashes; Gathered, clustered, Within the boundaries of stone and steel, Within the scorched depression upon the pillar. Then, a flame. Erupting, blazing across its

Great job! Your imagery was very nicely done. Your wording and choice of words was fantastic. It was truly a pleasure to read such a well-done piece.

This is a very unique type of poem. I wrote a quartet similar to this recently and it certainly reminds me of it. You did a pretty good job. It ...

This poem is very meaningful. I especially enjoyed the ending. I liked how you made him choose to take off the vest, his only protection, in order to take the ...

I When arrogance succumbs the deepest root then death be laid upon thee. Alas, as scores before have partaken, so does this empire crumble down upon itself. Babylon is now ...

What do you mean by "in gold-ish orange"

He paces his quarters, One hand on his belt. The other, beside him, Gloved in fine lion's pelt. The firelight warms him, Though not to the core. He sobs with ...

Okay imagry. You need to adjust your meter a little bit but this poem has good potential. Just work on it a bit and I bet it'll sound a lot ...

I know you heard this before, but great metaphors! Your imagery is also very nice as well.

This is too short for my tastes and quite cliche. Try to make your poem longer, more meaningfull, and more unique. There is lots of potential in it though, and ...

I enjoyed the simplicity of this, but it was quite cliche and rather bland. Try using more extravagant and meaningfull words to liven up your work and add more debth ...

First off, I'ma praticular fan of phoenixes and rhyming poems, so it was no suprise that I though your poem was great. But, on top of that, you used great ...

The westward wind blows, A keeper of secrets long past. Such marvels they hold!

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